sacrament of reconciliation

poems of tangled

obscurity-obsessions of

a lonely beholder

575 Haiku

-Raxtus

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4 thoughts on “sacrament of reconciliation

  1. Just a note: it seems the second line is 8 syllables and the last line is 6 (although maybe that isn’t the case). If it is, and having 575 is important, you might consider, dropping “of” from the second line and either dropping the “a” from the last line or keeping the “a” but making the “lonely” “lone”. Just some ideas.

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